Umbarean Corsairs--wording edit

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Frodo
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Umbarean Corsairs--wording edit

Post by Frodo » Thu Jun 05, 2008 7:07 am

The original text of this virtual card read:
"Also, if the Dúnadan’s company moves to Gobel Mírlond, it
may drop off and pick up characters there..."

I was thinking it would be clearer to word it as follows:

“Also, if the Dúnadan’s company moves to Gobel Mírlond, you may reorganize it with your company there (including followers)..."

Is this better? I thought the keyword "organize" would help.

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Post by Jambo » Thu Jun 05, 2008 8:45 am

Yep, seems fine to me. :)

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